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Even An Angel Can Fall-Graphic by Treo-LeGigeo Even An Angel Can Fall-Graphic by Treo-LeGigeo
An illustrated version of my short story Even An Angel Can Fall. All images are accurate with the exception of the attic (which is just a random attic) and the one of Nazi soldiers (which is of real Nazi soldiers, but is taken out of context and not related to the Jewish persecution). I had a massive list written up sourcing all the images, but deviantART somehow deleted it from my description. I'll come back and re-find all my sources again sometime.
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JadenItanenn Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
Wow, I'm not sure what to say. I know that You must have done some kind of research because of the information you had. [learned much the same in my Holocaust Class.] It was a Verry powerful story, and I wouldn't be all that surprised if it was true as well.

Only had one little tid bit that might have been wrong. the inmates that where told/volunteered to work the crematoria... yes they did get better food, rooms, clothes...But they also had to remove stuff from the bodies, along with burning them. Many of them committed suicide if I remember my Class correctly. I don't think to many where Killed by the SS.
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Treo-LeGigeo Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012   Writer
Researched the hell out of this, yes. WWII is one of my historical focuses (along with the Cuban Missile Crisis and various ancient times). So no, not actually true, but glad it could be (well, no, I wouldn't be glad if this was true, but as a writer it's always nice to hear).

Thanks for the tip about the crematoria, I think I found something about those workers having to be disposed of but I'll bow to your knowledge. Thanks for reading and commenting!
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JadenItanenn Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
Don't bow yet :P I'm just saying what I've heard/read. I took a lot of weird facts from that class.. Like the SS Tried to not go into the sleeping areas if they could help it. the fleas you see.

Its good to see people actually putting some kind research into stuff like the Holocaust and WWII, our teacher [and I've noticed this a bit too] has pointed out that more and more people are forgetting about it, or thinking its all fake. when there are less and less people from that time that remember it to prove them wrong. I personally don't see how people can say its just a hoax after seeing pictures like that, or reading first hand accounts or anything about it..
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Moombeam36 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, that's all I can say really. Reminds me of the book "Sarah's Key." So sad...
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Amanda-Graham Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Professional Writer
featyred and favorited thank you so much for revisiting it (hugs)
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Amanda-Graham Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Professional Writer
Treo-LeGigeo,

This is a wonderful work of both Visual Poetry and Prose. I would feature it today but hesitate for only one reason; the potographs you have used, and the graphics will need full attribution such as those provided for [stock] and [brush] components of visual media on dA. Images may be grouped if the attribution sources are the same. If links to those image components of the work are available and easily pasted into your 'Description' block for the work that would be nice for readers as well.

Please 'Note' me when you have accomplished this minor repair.

Thanks

Mandy
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3Tawnystripe Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010  Student General Artist
.... I'm speechless. I seriously don't know what to say...
this was... just.... amazing, I could say in the least...
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alyth3cat Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2010
This was very emotive. It's interesting how distance and spaced the narrator feels from the story. It's almost as if the person has decided to tell it as a dream or a fiction so as not to relive the horrors. It was an interesting effect.
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theaudone Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2010
such a tragic story-i'm surprised you don't have more favorites.
from whom did you get your inspiration?
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Treo-LeGigeo Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2010   Writer
Thank you, glad you enjoyed it.

I didn't have a specific inspiration, but I read a story set in Auchwitz which prompted me to write my own, and the title and motif was inspired from a lyric form "Satellites" by September, but the plot just sort of came to me from the "even an angel can fall" phrase and the concentration camp idea.
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CaptainMcPants Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2010   Writer
The layout is what really did it for me. The idea that you start at the top with clouds and a falling angel :floating:, quoting lover boy, and then moving on through the story up until Clarizza’s release, where the layout becomes important again in the feathers and water. Perfect.

Also, I think it’s very thorough of you to credit each item used so well. Most people don’t bother and they don’t know how much of an annoyance it is for me to not know these things.

If you’re so keen on improving the ending (which is the only thing I’d even think of changing), you could perhaps make her suicide make more sense. As a reader, I felt left in the dark. :? How long did she wait before suicide became an option? Why now, out in the real world? Why didn’t she do it in the camp where life sucked? The method and location of her suicide is perfect though – it’s cohesive to the fallen angel theme, and links the beginning to the end.

Thanks for submitting your hard work to our proud :icondoctrinaire:
I’d love to see more of this!

~Hector :b0x0rz:
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Treo-LeGigeo Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2010   Writer
Thanks for the thorough comment and feedback!

It took me quite a bit of research to make this story as historically accurate as possible, and quite a while to find the authentic pictures, I'm glad you could appreciate it.

Hmmmm, good point about the ending, I'll go over that. I guess I wasn't clear enough, I was imagining that it wasn't Clarizza's imprisonment that drove her to suicide, but the knowledge that she had (inadvertently) caused her lover's death. She only killed herself after she left the camp, found out about his fate, and decided she couldn't live with the guilt. But good job pointing that out, I'll go back through that.

You're welcome, great to hear your enjoyed it. This is my only piece of visual literature so far, but maybe I'll do another soon :-)
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CaptainMcPants Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2010   Writer
I think it's everyone's duty :salute: to give thorough feedback. Simply liking something doesn't help develop the writer.

Your explanation of the ending makes perfect sense. You can keep it for that reason, but perhaps just make it slightly more idiot-proof. Sometimes people don't make the connection, and making this connection is very important because the ending is always the most important part.

I'm only dissapointed :lonely: to see that you did not submit anything for the :icondoctrinaire: contest currently running. Your Even An Angel Can Fall graphic would have been some stiff competition for my Affectionate Philanthropy and everyone elses' incredible entries.

But fret not, all members of the group are encouraged to read through the contest entries and vote :judge: on their favourites, regardless of whether they entered. A little competition makes better players of us all. To vote, simply tell :iconthelovetrain: in a note which author(s) you'd like to see win this competition.
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Treo-LeGigeo Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2010   Writer
I'll look into it, thanks.

Actually, I'm not quite sure how the group contests work, is there always a contest running? And do you just have to pick a prompt and write about it or are there other guidelines?
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CaptainMcPants Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2010   Writer
Assuming you're asking after you've read our contest's details, I can certainly tell you that :icondoctrinaire: makes its contests public by letting each member know in our blogs. There are short periods where no contest is running - we wouldn't want our members getting exhausted.
Just pick a prompt and write something you think would be competition to the other members. Sure there are more guidelines specific to the contests, but they're always mentioned in the blogs.
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Treo-LeGigeo Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010   Writer
OK, thanks. I'm quite busy right now, with several deadlines coming up, but maybe I'll enter some contests in the future.
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CaptainMcPants Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010   Writer
I'm awaiting anxiously :eager:
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DJChocolate-Lover Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2010  Student General Artist
Awww. *whimpers* so sad, brilliant ending.
If you can you should read the book 'Annexed'
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MKKitanafan Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010  Hobbyist
great story...my eyes was in tears...
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MKKitanafan Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010  Hobbyist
omg I can't write :XD: my eyes were* in tears... :)
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oilerx724 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2010
I loved reading this.
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Treo-LeGigeo Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2010   Writer
thankyou, glad you liked it.
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xylo834 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010
The illustrations are good and all, but the text lacks anti-aliasing. It strains the eyes a little.

definition: (computer graphics) a technique that is used to smooth jagged distortions in curves and diagonal lines so they appear smoother. e.g. Blurring the edges of a font on screen to soften the look of bitmapped type.

That's all I have to say, since I've said a shizload already.
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Treo-LeGigeo Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010   Writer
How do I do that?

I may add that I am not using my normal computer and actually put the pages together as a picture on Paint.

I tried to gimp it, but a six A4 page size picture is waaaaayyyyyyyy to big and the program was too small to use.
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xylo834 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010
:lmao: Oh, MSPaint.

I don't know how to toggle it on and off on Paint, it's always automatically on. It might have to do with whether or not your actual computer settings are switched to enable font smoothing.

If that's the case, you'll have to look up how to enable it for it to be applied to all applications. And don't ask me how. Google it. Always. If in doubt, google it.

Sure it's big, but it doesn't have to be A4 sized if it's just going to be put on deviantART. You can make it much smaller and still readable (600 pixels wide would be sufficient, I'd say, and 11pt or even 12pt font would be fine. That's just me, though.)
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rachulandafish Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It kinda sucks how Clarizza, which is an ugly name, means angel when a pretty name like...Rachel for example means something ugly like "ewe". Grr.
Neato story. Very impactual. That's a word. I made it up.
The pictures are totally going to forever haunt my soul.
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Treo-LeGigeo Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009   Writer
Rachel means "ewe?" hahaha Sorry.

Thanks

I thought the naked anorexic boys pic was pretty freaky.


Just wondering, did you like the ending? I am looking for ways to improve it so if you have a suggestion, then pray tell, and right now my biggest source of debate is the ending.
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rachulandafish Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yes Rachel means "ewe." As in a female sheep. WTF?!
It says in the bible that Rachel was shapely and beautiful and yet she gets condemed to this...this SHEEPINESS!
I am not happy, Jan.

They're naked? Oh. I thought they were wearing loin cloths or something. I couldn't see any...parts.

Yeah the ending's fine. Noffin wrong with it. You silly goose, worrying about silly things. It's impactual. That is TOTALLY my new word. I'm gonna use it all the time. But it's truly very emotional.
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Treo-LeGigeo Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009   Writer
Who was Rachel, and what did she dom and who's Jan?

I think they're too anorexic for you to see anything, but I can't see any clothing.
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rachulandafish Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Rachel was Jacob's wife (ha isn't that awesome!)
Basically Jacob loved Rachel but when he asked her dad if he could marry her, he tricked him into marrying her sister Leah. Then eventually he married Rachel as well and she was his favourite wife. God didn't like that so he punished Rachel by making her a BARON! Yeah, so on Leah could have babies but then one day Rachel had a baby called Joseph, the one in the rainbow coat...he was his favourite son :D
the end.
Jan...is...Janice...?
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Treo-LeGigeo Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009   Writer
It's spelt "barren" and it's an adjective,not a noun. I know because it was in the Silence story.

How can she have babies if she's barren?

And who's Janice?
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rachulandafish Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
oh well soooooorry miss pedantic.

its a crazy god thing. he was like "no, i will not let you have babies," and then Jacob was sad so god was like "i feel sorry for you. here, have a baby."

it's a figure of speech, sarina. get over it.
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Treo-LeGigeo Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2009   Writer
Ok, I'm, confused now.

Ewe. hehehehe sorry.
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PaulLuvr Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2009
Illustrated quite well, my dear. It gives your story more impact and leaves the reader with the true evidence.
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Treo-LeGigeo Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009   Writer
Why thank you.
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PaulLuvr Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009
Yuppa. ^^
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