An illustrated version of my short story Even An Angel Can Fall. All images are accurate with the exception of the attic (which is just a random attic) and the one of Nazi soldiers (which is of real Nazi soldiers, but is taken out of context and not related to the Jewish persecution). I had a massive list written up sourcing all the images, but deviantART somehow deleted it from my description. I'll come back and re-find all my sources again sometime.
Wow, I'm not sure what to say. I know that You must have done some kind of research because of the information you had. [learned much the same in my Holocaust Class.] It was a Verry powerful story, and I wouldn't be all that surprised if it was true as well.
Only had one little tid bit that might have been wrong. the inmates that where told/volunteered to work the crematoria... yes they did get better food, rooms, clothes...But they also had to remove stuff from the bodies, along with burning them. Many of them committed suicide if I remember my Class correctly. I don't think to many where Killed by the SS.
Researched the hell out of this, yes. WWII is one of my historical focuses (along with the Cuban Missile Crisis and various ancient times). So no, not actually true, but glad it could be (well, no, I wouldn't be glad if this was true, but as a writer it's always nice to hear).
Thanks for the tip about the crematoria, I think I found something about those workers having to be disposed of but I'll bow to your knowledge. Thanks for reading and commenting!
Don't bow yet I'm just saying what I've heard/read. I took a lot of weird facts from that class.. Like the SS Tried to not go into the sleeping areas if they could help it. the fleas you see.
Its good to see people actually putting some kind research into stuff like the Holocaust and WWII, our teacher [and I've noticed this a bit too] has pointed out that more and more people are forgetting about it, or thinking its all fake. when there are less and less people from that time that remember it to prove them wrong. I personally don't see how people can say its just a hoax after seeing pictures like that, or reading first hand accounts or anything about it..
This is a wonderful work of both Visual Poetry and Prose. I would feature it today but hesitate for only one reason; the potographs you have used, and the graphics will need full attribution such as those provided for [stock] and [brush] components of visual media on dA. Images may be grouped if the attribution sources are the same. If links to those image components of the work are available and easily pasted into your 'Description' block for the work that would be nice for readers as well.
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This was very emotive. It's interesting how distance and spaced the narrator feels from the story. It's almost as if the person has decided to tell it as a dream or a fiction so as not to relive the horrors. It was an interesting effect.
I didn't have a specific inspiration, but I read a story set in Auchwitz which prompted me to write my own, and the title and motif was inspired from a lyric form "Satellites" by September, but the plot just sort of came to me from the "even an angel can fall" phrase and the concentration camp idea.
The layout is what really did it for me. The idea that you start at the top with clouds and a falling angel , quoting lover boy, and then moving on through the story up until Clarizza’s release, where the layout becomes important again in the feathers and water. Perfect.
Also, I think it’s very thorough of you to credit each item used so well. Most people don’t bother and they don’t know how much of an annoyance it is for me to not know these things.
If you’re so keen on improving the ending (which is the only thing I’d even think of changing), you could perhaps make her suicide make more sense. As a reader, I felt left in the dark. How long did she wait before suicide became an option? Why now, out in the real world? Why didn’t she do it in the camp where life sucked? The method and location of her suicide is perfect though – it’s cohesive to the fallen angel theme, and links the beginning to the end.
Thanks for submitting your hard work to our proud I’d love to see more of this!
It took me quite a bit of research to make this story as historically accurate as possible, and quite a while to find the authentic pictures, I'm glad you could appreciate it.
Hmmmm, good point about the ending, I'll go over that. I guess I wasn't clear enough, I was imagining that it wasn't Clarizza's imprisonment that drove her to suicide, but the knowledge that she had (inadvertently) caused her lover's death. She only killed herself after she left the camp, found out about his fate, and decided she couldn't live with the guilt. But good job pointing that out, I'll go back through that.
You're welcome, great to hear your enjoyed it. This is my only piece of visual literature so far, but maybe I'll do another soon
I think it's everyone's duty to give thorough feedback. Simply liking something doesn't help develop the writer.
Your explanation of the ending makes perfect sense. You can keep it for that reason, but perhaps just make it slightly more idiot-proof. Sometimes people don't make the connection, and making this connection is very important because the ending is always the most important part.
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The illustrations are good and all, but the text lacks anti-aliasing. It strains the eyes a little.
definition: (computer graphics) a technique that is used to smooth jagged distortions in curves and diagonal lines so they appear smoother. e.g. Blurring the edges of a font on screen to soften the look of bitmapped type.
That's all I have to say, since I've said a shizload already.
I don't know how to toggle it on and off on Paint, it's always automatically on. It might have to do with whether or not your actual computer settings are switched to enable font smoothing.
If that's the case, you'll have to look up how to enable it for it to be applied to all applications. And don't ask me how. Google it. Always. If in doubt, google it.
Sure it's big, but it doesn't have to be A4 sized if it's just going to be put on deviantART. You can make it much smaller and still readable (600 pixels wide would be sufficient, I'd say, and 11pt or even 12pt font would be fine. That's just me, though.)
It kinda sucks how Clarizza, which is an ugly name, means angel when a pretty name like...Rachel for example means something ugly like "ewe". Grr. Neato story. Very impactual. That's a word. I made it up. The pictures are totally going to forever haunt my soul.
Rachel was Jacob's wife (ha isn't that awesome!) Basically Jacob loved Rachel but when he asked her dad if he could marry her, he tricked him into marrying her sister Leah. Then eventually he married Rachel as well and she was his favourite wife. God didn't like that so he punished Rachel by making her a BARON! Yeah, so on Leah could have babies but then one day Rachel had a baby called Joseph, the one in the rainbow coat...he was his favourite son the end. Jan...is...Janice...?